Comments - The Luckiest Guy (PART 4)

shela ( F C ) at 2006-12-20

I am speechless, I wonder I couldnt sleep.
But as always, too many questions with no answer, this cant be th final part cause you have not said what your readers should know as the final part.
so change it to part 4.

you have said you were wrong two times. WHY?
why are you feeling this?
no answer!
and yeah why are you the luckiest?
please just complete it if this is your final part.


mrhope at 2006-12-20

My friend goran, you are doing it big.
exellent work here.
keep it up dude, you are so admired through out the site.

desigirl ( F C D ) at 2006-12-20

What can i say more than what you already know

I hope the reason of your luckiness is another princess that truly deserve your kind heart.

Italian Stallion ( F P C D ) at 2006-12-20

Wow, a great ending to your sequal. I really loved it. Great write. The flow and structure were excellent.

The last stanza had a few problems and here they are,

Now you are the luckiest guy,
So is me, now it is all fair.
Yet the reason of my luckiness,
With no one I shall share.

The second line, "So is me, now it is all fair." Should be changed to, "So am I, now it is all fair."

And the last two lines make no sense,

"Yet the reason of my luckiness,
With no one I shall share."

Maybe change it so it reads,

"Yet the reason for my luckiness is,
With no one I shall share."

or I don't know do something, it doesn't really flow there, but I know how it is being said, with a pause.

Overall outstanding write, I really liked it. Keep up the wonderful work like always.

Peace, Joe

freshta ( C ) at 2006-12-20

Better than all of the other parts.
I love it buddy.

SouthernღCharm ( F P C D ) at 2006-12-20

This is sooo beautiful!!!
I absoulutly love it!
Keep up the great work.
You're one of my favorite writers!
God Bless 5/5


Bryan ( F P C D ) at 2006-12-20

Ive read all 3 parts to this poem and this is the perfect ending to the story book, great flow 5/5!!!

~if only he knew~ ( F P C ) at 2006-12-20

I've read them all and i think they all are great i like the way you made them with emotion well it looks like you did i dont know if you did but anyways it is good 5.5

Fire-lilly ( F P C D ) at 2006-12-20

Great ending. I loved this poem and the other three parts of it. Keep up the good work:) Another 5/5

the pale queen of the silent nig ( F P C ) at 2006-12-21

this a poem that will become a part of the reader as iam sure it took something from you that it will never be replaced...its sad..but the ending gived a hope..a light for u and the reader to follow..
just like the other parts this one was outstaning with a great meaning behind thing i like about ur poem is that at the end of each poem u seem to leave some question unswered wich makes the reader to await impationtly for some word from u hoping to explain wat they are so courise about...but after all it was a marvolous poem...

goran ( F P C D ) at 2006-12-21

Your each comment makes me to write another poem so I could read another comment by you. thank you very much.

UnToLd TrUtH ( F C D ) at 2006-12-21

This is really good and I loved the flow of it. You put a lot of passion in it and it shows. 5/5

¤Kitty¤ ( F P C D ) at 2006-12-21

Heeyyyy. thnks for the comment. and fyi- youv'e got skill!

Mousie ( F P C D ) at 2006-12-22

Wow, they all were wonderful, but i think this was your best write. the amount of emotions and pleading put into these poems is unbelievable, and you really portray your feelings well. the flow was a little stumbled on a few sentences, i don't remember which ones, but it was fine otherwise. but after reading all of them, it just deserved a 5/5, beautiful work, i always like your poems.

Mr_blueknight ( F C D ) at 2006-12-22

Wow so wonderful piece it is I love the heart behind this poem and the passion when it is written I love the flow and the message was great Im glad to know that you are trying to move now great piece again

awww ( F C D ) at 2006-12-22

Wonderful... a perfect ending to the series... im speechless... ive been waiting for the ending and now i got it... dont know what to say... even numbers cant justify it... beautiful...


MiNHღDEE ( F P C D ) at 2006-12-22

Yu truly are an ah`mazing writer . I`m speechless . The amount of emotions poured into the three parts, and this one is just wow . I think this was unbelievably marvelous . Beautiful .

Shannon ( C ) at 2006-12-23

I read all of them...All I can say is excellent. Great job! I like how it was in parts... And each part was different. I gave you a 5/5 on all of them.


♥LuvSuxGetDrunk♥ ( F P C D ) at 2006-12-27

Oh wow...
I absolutely loved this.
I thought it was very well written and a pleasure to read.

hillo ( F C D ) at 2006-12-28

Amazing...that's all i have to say

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