Comments - Fairytale love

*Gem* ( F P C D ) at 2007-05-24

"You said it would be you and me,
No matter what anyone tried to say,
At least for now, I'll have to disagree,
I'm not fond of these games you play."

It's a great poem, it really shows how love can turn sour yet for the best (if that makes sense)
Excellent rhythm

B r o k e n xx ( F C D ) at 2007-05-24

I loved this poem!! The flow was one of the best ive ever seen and words were so beautiful. The last stanza was magnificent. Awesome writing, keep it up. 5/5 Xx Chrissie

lizzie ( P C ) at 2007-05-24

That was so good.
I loved it. Excellent work!5/5

hani ( F C ) at 2007-05-24

Very nice and beautiful , you realy a god gifts good work 5/5

Live WeLL ( F P C D ) at 2007-05-24

Nice nice nice.. you really have an awesome way of ending your poems.. i love the way you end them.. one again amazing write and of course something that a ot of people can relate to.. keep it uPp =]

SecludedSerendipity ( F P C D ) at 2007-05-24

This poem flowed really well. It's very saddening when a relationship doesn't work out, yet it was very nice to see that your poem had a positive ending.

"I once felt the sorrow when we were apart,
Now being without you makes me complete. "

^^ Very nice indeed.

xxSnow AngeLxx ( F C D ) at 2007-05-25

Wow!!...great work!
this peice flowed like perfect ending!...just great!...
Kp wriiting!

Alyson ( F P C D ) at 2007-05-25

The ending was a little different then I expected when I started reading. This was a wonderful poem and I really like it (though this isn't the genre I'm use to reading). Keep up the good work. *5/5*


*~* broken soul *~* ( F P C D ) at 2007-05-26

I can relate to the beginning of this one.... its a great poem. it flows nicely. its well written. i was reading some of your other poems and you are good with a pencil haha... great job. and thank you for the comment. ill will use that title. it does fit it. thank you

BreeAnna ( C ) at 2007-05-26

I really liked the last stanze last line. that was really good and it made me take a second look. I have felt that way so many times, but reading it from someone else just made it sink more in. great job.
keep it up.

.K.i.T.t.Y. ( F P C D ) at 2007-05-26

The twist in this poem was great. i love it all. i'm going to add it to my favorites after i rate you. (5/5)

the only thing it alter is "lonely town" idk, try to come up with something more fairytale related. Like make an allusion with it. that would add something extra to the poem.


BrokenREALiTy ( F P C D ) at 2007-05-27

I gave up my entire world for you,
While you promised to do the same,
It was fairytale love, we tried to pursue,
Now your saying someone else's name.
`Love . It . That last line in the stanza was really powerful to me . This is a cliche topic, but you totally rocked it [:

I once felt the sorrow when we were apart,
Now being without you makes me complete.
`You`ve put into words what I wanted to say for so long now and didn`t figure out how to say until this year . Beautiful way to end it .

I really liked it . It really shows how love may end, but it`s for the best and you`ll always be able to get over it .

Vanessa ( F P C D ) at 2007-05-27

I agree a cliche subject, but this poem is not cliche, it is perfect. the twist at the end was amazing, and diffrent, and diffrent is always good. The last stanza is powerfully full of deep emtion, the flow of the entire poem is wonderfully well plotted, and the word choice was excellent. I really liked this, It keept attention all the way though it.

Alex ( F C D ) at 2007-05-28

Really pretty. Sorry I don't have a long comment like these other people haha, but I thought it was really nice.



Kaila ( F P C D ) at 2007-05-28

Oh my gosh
I'm so sorry
this poem is so good
it says what we all want to say sometimes
but it doesn't come out right
you showed us all how to write about this sore subject
wonderful job

Teria ( F P C D ) at 2007-05-29

For[[,]] I'd have surely turned around.
Now[[,]] being without you makes me complete.
^ commas

Other than that you did a wonderful job.
Loved it, once again great emotion. easily related to.
keep it up

Bloomed Rose ( F C D ) at 2007-05-30

That was really good. nice job. the rhyming was beautiful, and your wording flowed with the poem, nice job.

moonlil ( F P C ) at 2007-05-30

Great poem.

Gemma Ratcliffe ( C ) at 2007-05-30

I agree. Your last stanza was the best- felt that too many times!

M1K4 ( F P C D ) at 2007-05-31

This is SOOOOOOOO Good i love it and i can totally relate to every word! My favorite part is "You talk your way back into my heart,
Expecting acceptance for all your deceit,
I once felt the sorrow when we were apart,
Now being without you makes me complete." This is just such a good line i cant believe you could put all my feelings in such a beautiful way!

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