Comments - Lament of a Dying Butterfly

Richard Machado ( P C D ) at 2007-09-16

This was an excellent poem. It was elegantly mature; I loved the twisting of the feeling of security, it was quite intruiging (It might just be me who got this feeling :P) Anywhoo, the overall design of the poem plucked all the right strings in my own memories. I, simply, could identify with the poem, and I think it's purely beautiful, and would be flawless if it wasn't for the flow of the 8th line.

Awesome write you created here, "Sweet Fragility" (since I don't know your name)

~Richhiieeeee

Cella Bella ( F C D ) at 2007-09-16

What a beautiful piece of poetry. The repetition of the first line was very powerful and brilliant. It made the piece more meaningful and wasn't overbearing. The flow was wonderful as well. 5/5

marcella

DarkSpirit ( F C D ) at 2007-09-16

Incredible poem, metaphors are great and it is very unique. You created superb atmosphere and every line is filed with emotions. I don't prefer love poetry but this one is amazing! Well done! I really enjoy in it.

Shauna ( F C D ) at 2007-09-16

Amazing Poem!! Brilliant written and creative.. I really enjoyed reading this.. and very good flow as well! Great Poem!

5.5**
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And Thank You For Your Lovely Comment =)

Michael D Nalley ( F P C D ) at 2007-09-17

Wow this is the best metaphor I have read in a love poem for quite a while. It seems to reflect the reality that the beauty of romance is usually brief indeed

BabyGurl ( F P C D ) at 2007-09-17

This is SOOOOOOOOO AMAZING! the words were perfect and the flow was perfect to! the emotions ugh...all i can say is AMAZING! its beautiful!
KEEP UP THE GREAT WORK!

BabyGurl

Jennifer ( F P C D ) at 2007-09-17

Excellent rhyming. I loved how you repeated the first line. It really puts enphasis on it. Plus it's an awesome line/title. 5.

Christina Yap ( C ) at 2007-09-17

This a very creative and beautiful piece. I loved the flow of the poem. The repitition of the first line in each verse, it created a sense of perfection as well as complition. 5/5

Veamm ( F P C D ) at 2007-09-18

Excellent!

for this one..its very deep and a thinking poem maybe, your vocab is great..descriptive and and so expressive..your have transform youir thoughts into art..its great!

keep it up!

Marc Ortiz ( F P C D ) at 2007-09-18

Oh wow.. another beautifully penned written piece by you. I really love the use of repetition in this poem, the flow was flawless. And again your word choice is amazing.

5/5

Jade ( F P C D ) at 2007-09-19

Well done, just amazing. The flow the idea. You have used language in all of your poems that is just so strong. You express your emotion in such a talented way. Great Job!

ANDRE AQUINO at 2007-09-21

I like this one, it is really greatly written and deep. 5/5 for you keep up...

Lisa ( C ) at 2007-09-22

Good flow, amazing poem. I loved it. Great job.

Andrew Morton ( F P C D ) at 2007-09-22

...death...lament.....and butterfly, i love how you threw that contrast in there...this was an incredible piece, you have amazing form and your word choice was killer, great job on this!

Novalyn Grace ( F P C D ) at 2007-09-23

What a superb piece of art. The repetition of the first line kept the piece strong and interesting -- really held a nice structure. Your vocabulary was, again, great, and the idea is executed wonderfully.

Amazing job!
You ooze talent.
Take Care,
Smiles,
*N

Ily Ms Perfectionist ( F P C D ) at 2007-09-23

Oh wow! I love this poem. Your wording you used was so so strong and the flow and repeativity (SP?) of "
Lament of a dying butterfly -- even the best shall fall;" was amazing. Great work!

Goran Rahim ( F P C D ) at 2007-09-23

This was a great poem written so greatly.
it shows that you have a great talent, keep up the great work.

a 5/5 from me as you truly deserve it

SlaveToTheMusic ( F P C D ) at 2007-09-23

Lament of a dying butterfly -- even the best shall fall;

hmm that line reminds me alot of a poem I wrote same few ending words..
I really did enjoy this piece I must say it was quite beautiful. Sweetly written. Well done on this one keep up the great work. ~Mel

broken reflection ( F P C D ) at 2007-09-23

Such a beautiful poem... enjoyed every stanza, every word, every letter lol 5/5 keep it up

PRiDE ( F P C D ) at 2007-09-23

I love this. It was absolutely amazing.
The repetition of that first line was great & the metaphors used within the poem was spectacular. The flow was flawless and I have no complaints on this one. You did an amazing job. :) Overall: 5.5 ---- Stephanie Lynn .+.


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