Comments - Not Falling Apart

xXx SeCrEt WiSh xXx ( F P C D ) at 2007-10-15

HAHAHA. oh i wonder how many girls can read this and be like how i wish i had said that to him. anyway. i loved this. when i first started reading i thought it was going to be a poem filled with melancholy, but nevertheless i loved the transition that took place towards the end. your flow was flawless throughout the entire piece while the imagery content and wording all came together to create a truly beautiful read. and of course my favourite part has to be the last stanza. i know it's about getting your own back but the way you portrayed it was "Yeah up yours" and i love that side of you. it certainly made me crack up laughing. beautiful job with this. && it's nice to finally see you with a new poem! . have missed your writing lots!!

*Charisma* ( F P C D ) at 2007-10-15

Okay the flow and rhyme of this piece has got to be one of your best! It was really great and I could picture the whole piece. I'm not one for poems with reference to sex or sex before marriage, but that's got nothing to do with how well your wrote this and how you really thought out this piece. Nice job!

Deana ( F P C D ) at 2007-10-15

Great job,Hit em where it hurts,their ego! Loved the ending.

XoX The Forbidden Smile oXo ( F P C D ) at 2007-10-16

I absolutly loved this poem. it was an amazing write and something i could read over a thousand and one times with out getting sick of it. heck i even read it from last stanza to first to see what it would be like! and it was pretty that was to. good work dear!

ps- thanks for the comment, lol. i'm not keen on a part though and trying to fix it up! haha

with luvs: Terra

HOLLYWOODxBANGBANG ( F P C D ) at 2007-10-16

Well, you should already know that I loved this, I really did. I didn`t see the end coming at all and when it did, BAM lmao. Great poem, Darling. You`re very talented, I don`t know how many times I`ve said it before or how many more times I`ll have to say it, but my God lol.


Tammie ( F P C D ) at 2007-10-16

Haha the end of this made me actually laugh out loud. I so didn't see that coming. To be honest, from the beginning I thought it was going to be a typical sad love poem, but Oh how I was wrong. I loved it. :] The flow, storyline and rhyming were all perfect. You created great imagery with your details as well, which made this poem so great. A very enjoyable write. :] 5/5


Pete ( F P C D ) at 2007-10-16

Ha. Aint that just like a slap in the chops. I say serves him damn right.
This is definitely one of the best poems I have read in quite some time, not only is it the fun part of it at the end. It keeps you attentive all the way through, halfway through I was feeling really sorry for woman. Such a turn of emotion. I do love a good twist in the tale.

I need not say more than this ..

Amazing Poem! [5/5]


Ace ( P ) at 2007-10-16

I love how it truened around in the end. you gave the story of some one so sad then bam! the girl turns around and makes him look foolish! love it! keep it up!

Cindy ( F P C D ) at 2007-10-17

It's great to see a new poem from you Gem :) Missed reading your work. Excellent job on this.
Hope you win
Take Care
Love Cindy

Dora ( F C ) at 2007-10-17

Hey great job on this poem!!

Kelly ( F P C ) at 2007-10-18

Oh god, that is hilarious.

loved it. So funny, i hope he choked on his drink lol.


♥shyann♥ ( F P C ) at 2007-10-21

Wow excellent poem!!! lol a very funny and enjoyable read.....i love the way you ended it...very clever!! this ones definetly going in my favourites 5/5:)

Eddie at 2007-10-21

Good poem 5/5 keep it up

HeartBrokenFairy ( F P C D ) at 2007-10-21

Wow! 5/5 x

xBxRxOxKxExNx ( F C ) at 2007-10-21

Lol.. lmao... well done.. 5/5

udontwannaknow ( F P C ) at 2007-10-22

Great and long!

Len Jo at 2007-10-22

Loved the poem; it's actually universal. Us men need to do the same thing sometimes. haha! great stuff

Melissa at 2007-10-22

You go girl!!!Don't let no man think he is in control it's the 2000's it's women's turn for payback.So you keep your head high girl and keep on gettin it'''

truelyonee at 2007-10-23

Haha i love it.
i wish i had that much courage =]
you are amazing

smiles for alex ( F P C D ) at 2007-11-01

REALLY cool poem, I laughed out loud as i read the end bit. Every girl has done this at one point in their lives and it makes you feel invinsible great feeling lol. The flow was bloody exellent and i really loved the idea of the happiness and 'just deserts' as it were. Really good poem going in my favs :D xxx alex xxx

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