Comments - Her wish

Hooly Girl ( F P C ) at 2008-01-17

Aw i feel like that sometimes. keep up the good work

mOnStRiToS pRiNcEsS ( F P C D ) at 2008-01-23

Aw, this was such a great poem. One of the best saddest love poems I've ever read. The imagery was great. This will definately go into my favs! 5/5

.:CiNdY:.

Alexander ( F P ) at 2008-01-24

I love the imagery you put into this poem, it was very easy to simpy picture this girl standing on a hill with the wind blowing through her hair. The flow was one of magnificent rhythem. The twist at the end was the perfect way to finish this lovely piece of work off. Keep up the good work my friend. 5/5

Signed,
Alexander

jan the Depressed Devil ( F P C D ) at 2008-01-30

1st to 3rd stanza i didn't really had an idea what you're talking about.. the ending showed me the meanign of your poem.. the ending blew me away when you said "the paragraphs above
were nothing but lies
she could only wish
he saw her from those eyes.."
love this poem! =]

Stephanie Naylor ( F P C D ) at 2008-01-30

Awwwwww, this was again an amazing poem by you, i love how you started it out, like looking at the girl and then finished as if you wished he could see her through those eyes, it was perfectly penned, another well deserved 5/5

Shinobi ( F P C D ) at 2008-02-01

Wow, what a shocking ending. It all was described so well, the reader can truely believed that the boy found his true love, until the last paragraph shattered it in a blow. A great work 5/5

b3aUt1FuL d15a5t3r ( F P C D ) at 2008-02-01

I could totally relate to this amazing poem, i loved it.

GothicVampyress ( F P C D ) at 2008-02-03

I love the twist at the ending. It starts as a sweet love poem this ends with a sad realization. Very good and not what I'd expected. <3

SouthernxCharm ( F P C D ) at 2008-02-05

Aw okay now this is so much better.
So cute and sweet. I really enjoy reading
love poems. Stil straigh tot he point give
your reader a challenge next time you
write a poem. But other than that great
write.
5/5
<3tay

Kristina ( F P C D ) at 2008-02-06

Great poem, and wonderful way to throw a twist in there. It makes the reader start to wonder, and lets them use their own imagination. You did a fantabulous *haha my new word!* on this.. keep i tup! :]

Jade ( F P C D ) at 2008-02-06

That..... was beautiful! The imagery was amazing, and the end was such a turn of events. Great title for this poem!

DarkSpirit ( F C D ) at 2008-02-08

Interesting poem, I love the ending, whole piece is original and you expressed emotions on a very nice way.
Keep writing.

Raindrops ( F P C D ) at 2008-02-09

Dang and u liked my poem that hit hard nicely buetifully done 5/5

InvisiblyBroken15 ( F P C D ) at 2008-02-10

Excellent... absolutely loved loved loved the ending!... kudos on this one.

keep it up.

5/5

mOnStRiToS pRiNcEsS ( F P C D ) at 2008-02-12

Wow, this poem absolutely left me breathless. It has so much feeling in it. The flow fit just right. It was such an amazing piece. Good job!

.:CiNdY:.

AblissfulDREAMER ( F C D ) at 2008-02-12

Beautiful use of imagery here hun. The poem was short sweet simple and to the point which made it enjoyable to read. The ending was unexpected but fit the poem well. Again a great use of rhyme. Well done *5/5*

Evanescence ( F C D ) at 2008-02-17

First, I did ask for no love poems, but I am glad I decided to read this anyway. At first I though, oh now that another cliche love poem. This did surprise me though. For one, you used word choices I have not see yet or often such as lithe and silhouette. You kept it simple instead of dragging it out and on with too many words. YOu kept up a decent flow and then the best part. You had a surprise ending in which it all was a lie from a wishing girl's point of view without giving it away early on as most people would.

WilTED ( F P C D ) at 2008-02-20

The flow was flawless and this was a beautifully written piece. I really like it. It's short and simple but so full of passion. 5/5.

Lost and Confused ( F P C D ) at 2008-02-23

I really like this one. The twist at the end was brilliant! The flow was great, the word choice couldn't have been better, and the concept was clever. Great write! 5/5

Dark Dancerr ( F P C ) at 2008-02-28

Wow talk about surprising twist! Beautiful, sad poem. I loved it. It started off strong and finished off powerful. The words chosen were beautiful and elegant and the whole poem was a wonderful piece. This one was my favorite of yours I've read so far. 5/5


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