North Star

by Karl Wild GG23

I stare at the sky trying to count the stars,
Started over a hundred times by now.
I look to my heart trying to count the scars,
Wondering is it even possible, and how?

I know I've hurt you made you cry,
Like fading stars at dawn lost your trust.
My love for you endless like the sky,
Even with my mistakes incredibly unjust.

I never knew how much I loved you,
Until I tried to wipe your endless tears.
When I think of the times I was untrue,
It still kills me even after all these years.

I remember promising us both that day,
It wouldn't be the way it was then.
Vowed my love would never stray,
Would rather die than see you cry again.

You held my hand and stuck by my side,
Without your love the dreams were shattered.
Realizing now I don't have to count, I tried,
All along you've been the only star that mattered.

So I'll forever keep my promise to you,
In my heart I know you'll never be far.
The first time I saw you my soul knew,
You'd always be my beautiful north star.

*The North Star is the only one in the sky that never moves or leaves. No matter what it is always there to guide us home if we become lost or afraid.*

 

Submission date : 2009-11-17
Last edit : 2012-11-29

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FridusBlueheaven ( F P C D ) at 2009-11-20

Wow, Karl... This one is really well worded... I can relate to the story...

The last stanza is my favorite:

So I'll forever keep my promise to you,
In my heart I know you'll never be far.
The first time I saw you my soul knew,
You'd always be my beautiful north star.

Nice work, dude!!! It's an inspiration... 5/5 for this one!!!

MERCY is never shown ( F P C D ) at 2009-11-21

Wow yet again you have wrote an amazing piece i love it am expression of that kind of love and in such an amazing way you really are a magnificent writer im addin this to my favorites it was really deep and so pure like truely from the heart great job 5/5

No Need For A Name ( F P C D ) at 2009-11-22

Interesting. I enjoyed the opening metaphor, and you seemed to defiantly be leading somewhere...but then you really didn't. Yes, you moved onto love from the stars, but from there, you just seemed to be saying the same thing again and again, without any real progression in the story. Also, your flow seems a little off in places.

Peace and prosperity,

(RKD)

Lady Nik ( F P C D ) at 2009-11-22

I liked this hun :) you are so goog with love poems. But I want to see something different from you. Dazzle me with some dark poetry. I know you can do it because you are so talented and all of your poems have a nice touch to them. Lovely diction as always. Very clear message and easy to relate to. Come on surprise me with something new. Great as always dear :) Nik

Bad Habits Die Hard ( F P C D ) at 2009-11-23

Your an amazing poet let me just say that.

This was my favorite stanza:


So I'll forever keep my promise to you,
In my heart I know you'll never be far.
The first time I saw you my soul knew,
You'd always be my beautiful north star.

Keep em coming, i enjoy reading your poems



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