I probably said too much (rejigged)

by Em

I want to write about you
though I know I'll say too much.
I want to tell you how I feel
when I think about your touch.

Searching high and low,
I finally found that feeling,
the one that makes your head spin,
like you're touching the ceiling.

Enjoying the ride way too much
it's not just about my imagination anymore
it's about how you've made me feel,
my hearts no longer a closed door.

I've probably said too much now,
you'll know it's about you
but thanks for making me laugh,
thanks for being you.

Copyright: Em


Submission date : 2016-05-18
Last edit : 2016-05-18

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Em ( F P C D ) at 2016-05-18

Thanks Brenda for your comments.

Phil Laws ( P ) at 2016-05-18

I like how you flow through details that aren't the same things that are often said. The only thing I can't empathize with is fearing the end. I find that even cycles don't repeat as much when you stop expecting them to. It's best to enjoy the ride without thinking a crash into happening.

-EDIT- I guess I misunderstood your meaning in a few lines. I like this version better. The new lines are clearer and seem to fit the thrust of the rest more cohesively.

Em ( F P C D ) at 2016-05-18

Rejigged hope you get my meaning now.

The Po whet ( F P C D ) at 2016-05-19

Lovely write Em, good to know you're finding that feeling of loving again.

Em ( F P C D ) at 2016-05-19


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