Lament of a Dying Butterfly

by Sweet Fragility

Lament of a dying butterfly -- even the best shall fall;
By breaking the only rule of the game of seduction,
It shattered the illusion that I did not care at all --
And slowly started to bring forth my own destruction.

Lament of a dying butterfly -- even the best shall fall;
Hearts tormented by past betrayals and destroyed trust --
A test to see if you cared enough to break down my walls,
Not just another plan for own satisfaction of lust.

Lament of a dying butterfly -- even the best shall fall;
Staring at you with teary cheeks and pain-filled eyes,
Stricken down from the sky, a lost soul's desperate call --
For redemption and a way out of a flawless disguise.

Lament of a dying butterfly -- even the best shall fall;
Two creatures searching for comfort, tried to fly high --
Fell together towards the earth, in a world so small,
Held each other close, not yet ready to say goodbye.

Copyright (c) Sweet Fragility
9/15/07

 

Submission date : 2007-09-15
Last edit : 2007-09-15

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Shinobi ( F P C D ) at 2007-11-04

Really liked this poem. The choosing of words was amazing, the rhyming was good and structure well done. 5/5

mOnStRiiToS pRiiNcEsS ( F P C D ) at 2007-11-04

This sounds like a song to me. It's great. I loved it!!! 5/5

<mOnStRiTo'S pRiNcEsS>

Fsams ( F P C D ) at 2007-11-06

Wow this is an excellent poem with great consecutive rhymes and content. I love this type of poems which provoke creativitya nd motivate ppl to write :) 5/5

Tc
Fsams

NyellMoonlight ( F P C D ) at 2007-11-06

Wow... this is one of those heart-melting pieces...
Amazing poem, it proves that you are so talented writer. I like everything about this piece: It has superbly created atmosphere, great choice of words, excellently expressed emotions and it is very original.
Marvelous job on this one!
My favorite stanza is;

-Lament of a dying butterfly -- even the best shall fall;
By breaking the only rule of the game of seduction,
It shattered the illusion that I did not care at all --
And slowly started to bring forth my own destruction.-

I can relate to this piece in so many ways.
The repetition of the first line in every stanza is very effective.
Keep writing!

life is a soundtrack at 2008-05-25

I loved it



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